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PostSubject: My Pokemon Tale.   Tue Dec 08, 2009 6:08 am

This will not be the best.. This is the first ever story I have wrote..

Enjoy.


Part 1


Elentia, Land of dreams, friendship and fun. The land where Pokemon and Humans live in harmony.

Throughout the years there has been different teams, specialising in evil deeds with Pokemon, yet each were stopped by a young boy, named Ash, and his Pikachu.. Now, Ash is in Sinnoh, Team Galactic has returned and all of life has only one chance of survival.. All hope rests on the shoulders of one unsuspecting trainer.

Zoe, a 11 year old trainer, had just left her house and was going to Prof. Samson's lab at the edge of town. Zoe was known for being the first to express her views on any situation that cropped up in town.. She had long Blonde hair, she normally wore Navy blue Jeans, a green Short Sleeved shirt, a Red Jumper and small golden hoops in her ears. As she headed through town she remembered her Fathers last words before she left, " Remember Zoe, your Mother and I will always be here in your times of need.." Zoe smiled as she saw all her younger friends run through town chasing after their parent's Pokemon.

As Zoe reached the gates of the Lab, she spotted the two statues with two majestic Pokemon on the top, as she started to turn away from the Statues she saw out the corner of her eye a girl sporting a rather weird bowl shaped hair cut. When Zoe looked again, no-one was there.. Zoe shrugging, ran up the path to the small building at the top of the hill...

Zoe, out of breath from running, eventually got to the building where she would recieve a new friend who could help through all her troubles. As she pushed open the door a man who she instantly recognised as Prof. Samson. The Professor looked at Zoe, "I am going to hazard a guess, that you are Zoe and you are here for your starter Pokemon", Zoe watched as a little Monkey with a Flame on it's tail ran and jumped into her arms. "Well, looks like you guessed correctely, I am Zoe and yes, I am here for my Starter Pokemon.." As Zoe stroked the little Pokemon's head, the Professor watched the little Pokemon start to fall asleep and thought 'Wow, she seems to be able to calm Pokemon down..'

As Zoe and Prof. Samson walked through the Lab, the Girl Zoe saw earlier was holding a Phone... "But.. But.. Wait a minute.. What is so special about the girl. She is just like all of those other pathetic trainers we have seen.... Yes Charon, I'll make sure I don't let her out of my sight. No.. No.. How.. I thought he was away.. Wasn't he defeated by that idiot Champion Cynthia?? Wow.. That indeed is momentus news.. Cyr.. Oh Sorry.. I will make sure no-one finds out that he has returned. What of Jupiter, Mars and Saturn? Are they informed?.. Okay Charon.. I'll update you when the situation has got better on my side.. Apollo out."
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Tue Dec 08, 2009 1:37 pm

I like it! Keep going!

And btw, did you base the girl off a real person you know? 'Cause it does sound like it.
PS: I love skinny blondes, so make this game, make it realistic and send me the guy side of it. Razz
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 2:00 am

LucasFTW wrote:
I like it! Keep going!

And btw, did you base the girl off a real person you know? 'Cause it does sound like it.
PS: I love skinny blondes, so make this game, make it realistic and send me the guy side of it. Razz

Thanks =D

Yes this is actually based on one of my friends.

Will do =D
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 2:29 am

That is fantastic! Keep up the good work! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 2:33 am

LucarioLady wrote:
That is fantastic! Keep up the good work! Very Happy

Thanks =D

Next part should be up by Sunday
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 2:38 am

Daiko wrote:
LucarioLady wrote:
That is fantastic! Keep up the good work! Very Happy

Thanks =D

Next part should be up by Sunday

Cool, can't wait!
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 5:04 am

and here I was thinking no-one would like it..
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 9:52 am

awesome flower
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 9:52 am

I usually don't like when writers use characters from the anime because the characters tend to flat or static.
However, it seems your writing concentrates mainly on your own created character who has a lot of potential.

Anyway, I love reading.
So definitely keep it up, I'll be looking forward to more
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 9:54 am

duderplease wrote:
I usually don't like when writers use characters from the anime because the characters tend to flat or static.
However, it seems your writing concentrates mainly on your own created character who has a lot of potential.

Anyway, I love reading.
So definitely keep it up, I'll be looking forward to more

1. I hated to use Ash.. But it seemed so appropriate so that the story seemed to show a timeline aswell.
2. Thanks so Much both Mub and you Duderplease.
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 11:45 am

duderplease wrote:
I usually don't like when writers use characters from the anime because the characters tend to flat or static.
However, it seems your writing concentrates mainly on your own created character who has a lot of potential.

Anyway, I love reading.
So definitely keep it up, I'll be looking forward to more
ye i love reading but if the text is bad i just can't like it but this is just.... Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 12:47 pm

Part 2

As Zoe was walking through the Lab, she noticed all the baby Pokemon running free from room to room. Eventually, Prof. Samson stopped walking and turned back to face Zoe. "All right, here in this machine is three Pokeballs, each one contains a newly obtained Baby Pokemon, you can choose one, only one mind you". Zoe looking at the Pokeballs picked up the first and threw it into the air. As a white flash erupted from the red and white ball, the same Pokemon that had ran up to Zoe appeared.

Prof. Samson watched as the Pokemon appeared, "Ah, Chimchar, the Fire Monkey, this Pokemon is very fun loving but angers very easily". Zoe watched the Pokemon jumping about the room and thought 'wow, that Chimchar is like me..', Zoe turned to Prof. Samson, "I don't think this Pokemon would be best for me".

Zoe replaced the first Pokeball back in the machine. "Hmmm, next i'll see.. this one." Zoe picked up the Pokeball she pointed to and threw it into the air.
Prof. Samson watched the Pokemon burst out the Pokeball, "Ah, Chikorita, the Leaf Pokemon, this Pokemon hates to fight and is very sensitive Emotionally". Zoe looking at Prof. Samson said, "I think I will take this Pokemon".

Prof. Samson, handed Zoe the Pokeball containing Chikorita, five empty Pokeballs and a Pale Red device he called a "Pokedex".

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A bit less Climatic in this part due to it being the Pokemon Choosing part..

Sorry if this one is a little boring.

Thanks for all the positive comments everyone, I really appreciate it.. Enjoy.

This was done quicker than expected due to me having a ton of extra time on my hands.


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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 3:54 pm

i say keep going!!!
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Wed Dec 09, 2009 9:52 pm

I love it! But why didn't Zoe take Chimchar? Zoe and Chimchar could've had the best relationship.
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Thu Dec 10, 2009 12:54 am

You will see the reasoning for this as the plot unravels =D

Thankies Derock =D
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Thu Dec 10, 2009 3:20 am

It's great, btw your pokemon is done.

You know, I was thinking of making a story, but if I do how bout our chars have a pokemon battle. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Thu Dec 10, 2009 3:32 am

Lol =D

Thanks.

I would try to fit that in the story (I can't promise anything)
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Thu Dec 10, 2009 3:41 am

Well I just started my story, go read it, you may like it. Also pm me first so we can work out the battle and add it to both our stories.
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Thu Dec 10, 2009 7:44 am

Here is Part 3 of my story.

Yes the newest character is actually me =D
I thought I would add my self in to this (Oh and Zoe is my gf in real life, since Monday =D)


Thanks for all the positive comments, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

~Looks around for someone who can make a banner for this story =D~

*For those confused.. " is talking out loud, ' is what I do to represent the character is thinking

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Part 3

As Zoe was leaving the Lab, Prof. Samson turned round and said to his assistant, "Follow her, our master doesn't want her out of his sight.."

Zoe started heading through town to the Battle Dome to get in a tournament before leaving. 10 minutes later Zoe was trying to get Chikorita's moveset memorised. 'Okay, Razor Leaf, Tackle, Leech Seed and Synthesis.. Razor Leaf, Tackl..' At that moment a voice from a LoudSpeaker said.. "That is Aaron's third victory here and he needs one more to win the tournament for the third month in a row... The next challenger is.. Zoe.."

Zoe walked out into the Dome to the sound of every one in town chanting "Zoe... Zoe... Zoe... Zoe.." The only person Zoe was paying attention to though, was her best friend Aaron. "Well, well Zoe.. You eventually decided to grab yourself a starter then.." Zoe just grabbed the Pokeball at her waist and shouted "Chikorita, up and at 'em." Aaron, staring at Zoe said "You chose Chikorita.. Why.. Chikorita sucks.. Ah well, Chimchar, Bring the house down."

"Now Chimchar, Ember", "Chikorita, Leech Seed". As both trainers watched on as the moves reached both their Pokemon. As the Leech Seed hit Chimchar it started to tangle around Chimchars body and drain a little health away from it. As the Ember struck Chikorita, she was thrown backwards into the wall behind Zoe's left shoulder. "Come on Chikorita, use Synthesis to heal yourself." As Chikorita was healing itself, Aaron shouted to Chimchar, "Now Chimchar, use Scratch"

Chimchar, running at top speed towards Chikorita never noticed Chikorita move a few feet to the side. As Chimchar dove towards where Chikorita was 2 Seconds beforehand, it slammed into the wall and did a huge amount of damage to itself. Chikorita was bathed in sunlight and her legs stopped shaking.

As Chimchar started to stand up, a horn sounded throughout the Stadium.. Then out of the LoudSpeaker came the words "Time is up.. The winner is... Zoe... Zoe has won her first match in the tournament. Until next time folks"

As Zoe and Aaron walked through the building to the reception area, Aaron turned towards Zoe, "Congrats Zoe.. You eventually beat me at something.... Ow... Why'd ya hit me??".. As they reached the reception desk the girl behing the counter said, "Well done Zoe, Hard Luck Aaron, Zoe remember, you need to be back here next month for the next round of your dome challenge."


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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Thu Dec 10, 2009 9:40 am

cool i give this the highest ranking i can a: flower
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Thu Dec 10, 2009 3:58 pm

Keep going man, keep going!
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Fri Dec 11, 2009 1:41 am

Well. Someone hates it.. They just didn't see fit to post that in the topic D=

Next part will be up soon.

Has anyone noticed at
10 For 90%
1 Against 9%

The percentage only equaled 99%

Where'd the extra One percent go
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Fri Dec 11, 2009 11:13 am

they probably pressed thw rong button by accident cause accident's happen
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Fri Dec 11, 2009 11:18 am

I am not too bothered (The percentage thing is weird though)
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PostSubject: Re: My Pokemon Tale.   Fri Dec 11, 2009 2:15 pm

Daiko excellent story! Cant wait for the next part! Just one question is Zoe prononsed(spelling fail) Zo or like Zoey? Anyways outstanding story so far! Just like mub I give you a: flower
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