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PostSubject: Coaster's FanFic   Thu Apr 15, 2010 12:52 pm

Hey guys, Coaster here, and I sort of want to test my Fiction writing. So I decided to write my own little Pokémon Fanfic. The title is still testing, so suggestions are always welcomed. In this post I'll tell you a little bit about the story's background, as well as chapter releases and such. Let's begin with it.

Preface

The story takes place 10 years after the events of Ethan, or the events in Gold/Silver/Crystal/HeartGold/SoulSilver. Coaster, a young man, is determined to leave the farm he had grown up on for his whole life on a quest to become the best trainer there is. He, his sister Sarah, and later his cousin Daniel join in his adventures, which include traveling around Johto, collecting Gym Badges, meeting some interesting people, and of course, challenging the champion himself.

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COASTER MCKNIGHT

Coaster is a lively 16 year old boy. After living on his family's farm for most of his life, he decided that he wanted to set out on a Pokémon journey. Along with his sister and cousin, he embarks on an epic journey around Johto, meeting new and interesting people, while training up and building his friendships. Coaster is quick to react, always in thought and very aggressive when his friends are threatened.

SARAH MCKNIGHT

Sarah is a emotional 13 year old girl. After turning 13, she felt that responsibility is a big motif in her life, and after finding out that Coaster has embarked on a journey, she tags along, saying that "She needs to look after her big brother." Her Pokémon, Gospel, is her most prized possession and never wants to be apart from him. Sarah is a bit emotional, reacting to even the smallest things, but she knows her responsibility, and can become very serious when the moment is given.

DANIEL LO

Daniel is an energetic young boy of 16. He lives in Olivine City, and is always hanging out with Coaster, as just not being cousins, but best friends as well. After learning that Coaster had embarked on a journey, he rejects Coaster's offer to tag along as he's busy with "Learning the family business." After realizing that's there more than the Olivine Café to enjoy, he joins Coaster and Sarah and brings along his Houndour, a Pokémon that follows him all over the place. Daniel sometimes gets too energetic, and gets on the nerves of Coaster and Sarah. But when serious, he has the most intelligent insights that often help the group out of certain situations.

and more to come...

Updates

There will be a new chapter every Sunday, unless time struggles or special events.
4/15/10 - "The Egg"
4/17/10 - "Gospel"
4/21/10 - "Alexandria" | Oliver's name changed to Daniel, for the sake of using my cousin's actual name. Razz
5/1/10 - "Team Rocket?" | Changed the name of the story from "The Coaster Saga" to "Coaster's FanFic."
5/30/10 - "Really...? Team Racket?" | Added sprites for some flair before a battle.


Enjoy,

~ Coaster


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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu Apr 15, 2010 1:01 pm

Chapter 1 - "The Egg"


"Dad, I need help milking Bessie!" yelled Coaster, out in the barn. Coaster McKnight was a young man, about 16 years old, who grew up on his families farm. The farm had been around for generations, and has increasingly grew in size since it first was up, when the only thing sold was MooMoo Milk. Now, the farm had much more success. They had Mareep and Flaffy for wool, an Ampharos for energy, Torchic for hatching eggs, and even Grumpig and Ponyta here and there, although the Grumpig did not do much in favor for the farm, it was just Mrs. McKnight's favorite Pokémon.

"I'll help him!" yelled Sarah, coming out of the forest on a Ponyta. Sarah McKnight was Coaster's little sister, who at age 13, didn't think of herself being so little. Her parents usually didn't allow her to work on the farm with them until she had reach 15 years of age, but just turning 13 a month ago made Sarah feel as if she had already reached the age she needed to, and her parents didn't mind so much now. Arriving to the scene, Sarah jumped off the Ponyta and giggled as Coaster tried to wrestle down Bessie the Miltank. "C'mon Bessie, we just need some milk!" cried Coaster, struggling with Bessie. After about 10 minutes, Bessie finally gave in. "Alright, I'll just keep her calm while you milk her Sarah," said Coaster. Sarah did as told, with no complaints. "Alright, that's that. I'll carry the bucket of MooMoo Milk back to the farmhouse. Can you hurdle up the Miltank back to the pasture?"

"Yeah sure, no problem!" responded Sarah, with extreme delight. Quickly, she opened up the pen and allowed the Miltank to wander about. She jump onto Ponyta and rounded the Miltanks to lead them to the pasture. Meanwhile, Coaster had just arrived at the farmhouse. "Hey dad, here's the gallon of MooMoo Milk!"

"Thanks son! MooMoo Milk is becoming more and more of a demand from your Uncle George." Uncle George was the owner of the very famous Olivine Café in Olivine City. MooMoo Milk was a high demand there by tourists. Uncle George's son, Daniel, was 16 as well, and he and Coaster were very good friends. They usually did the business of delivering MooMoo Milk together, riding their bikes out to Olivine shore, where the old hag lived, all the way to East Ercuteak, where their Aunt Sydney lived. Route 39 was a great place to live, since Coaster and Daniel did see a lot of things from both cities. DING! DONG! The doorbell rang, causing the Houndour and Growlithe to furiously bark like usual. "I'm here to pick up the MooMoo Milk!" As soon as the dogs heard the voice, they all stopped barking and starting whimpering. Coaster opened the door. It was Daniel.

"Great timing! We just finished packing them in the glasses!"

"Awesome! Hey, you wanna come help me take this back to the Café?" asked Daniel. Coaster looked back at his parents, and they nodded with approval.

"Alright! Let's go!" They got on their bikes and rode off to Olivine City. The bike ride was only 10 minutes, but the boys made sure they were caught up with all the school talk.

"They made another discovery?" asked Coaster.

"Yup, apparently this new island is suppose to be loaded with new Pokémon."

"Awesome! I hope we get a change to go visit there sometime..."

"Oh we do! I think it's on our field trip list for next year."

"Even better! I can't wait to go!"

"Me too! I heard you can find - hey, what's that?" pondered Daniel. There on the ground was an egg. But it was no regular egg. It had blue and red triangular shapes on it, and it shook a bit every now and then. "Um, it's an egg, but I don't know what's in it." Coaster got off his bike and picked up the egg. "I'll keep it for a bit and show it to my parents, they may know what it is."


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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu Apr 15, 2010 2:26 pm

Oh dear.

Do I smell something close to what Eragon is?

Blue Egg.. Check
Farmer.. Check
Weird Name.. Check Razz


Now I am looking for two weirdos in outfits to appear, a mad king to be heard of, and some random Dwarves to be thrown in and we have a great new Eragon Book! Smile

Just playing with ya. This is some good stuff, but could you have come up with a more OU nickname for a cow Sad Bessie? I mean, everyone and their Poochyena calls cows Bessie. Evil or Very Mad Call it something weird.. Something like Coaster, but a bit less on the weird side.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu Apr 15, 2010 2:52 pm

Daiko wrote:
Oh dear.

Do I smell something close to what Eragon is?

Blue Egg.. Check
Farmer.. Check
Weird Name.. Check Razz


Now I am looking for two weirdos in outfits to appear, a mad king to be heard of, and some random Dwarves to be thrown in and we have a great new Eragon Book! Smile

Just playing with ya. This is some good stuff, but could you have come up with a more OU nickname for a cow Sad Bessie? I mean, everyone and their Poochyena calls cows Bessie. Evil or Very Mad Call it something weird.. Something like Coaster, but a bit less on the weird side.
Lol, to be honest I never read or watched Eragon :s
And Bessie is too OU to not be used Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu Apr 15, 2010 3:28 pm

Great job Coaster your writing really impressed me. Smile
I used to have a fanfiction going along about a year in half ago. I actually had like 60 followers on fanfiction.net if you've heard of that website. But then I stopped sadly. I may get back into it eventually.
Anyhow I bet the egg is going to be a Mareep considering it's last stage Ampharos is your favorite Pokemon.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu Apr 15, 2010 7:28 pm

Beastof2000 wrote:
Great job Coaster your writing really impressed me. Smile
I used to have a fanfiction going along about a year in half ago. I actually had like 60 followers on fanfiction.net if you've heard of that website. But then I stopped sadly. I may get back into it eventually.
Anyhow I bet the egg is going to be a Mareep considering it's last stage Ampharos is your favorite Pokemon.
I went ahead and look at fanfiction.net. Looked really impressive, with over 30,000 fanfics on Pokémon. It does seem like a big accomplishment getting 60 followers on that site though. Maybe I should start uploading there too...?
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu Apr 15, 2010 7:29 pm

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Beastof2000 wrote:
Great job Coaster your writing really impressed me. Smile
I used to have a fanfiction going along about a year in half ago. I actually had like 60 followers on fanfiction.net if you've heard of that website. But then I stopped sadly. I may get back into it eventually.
Anyhow I bet the egg is going to be a Mareep considering it's last stage Ampharos is your favorite Pokemon.
I went ahead and look at fanfiction.net. Looked really impressive, with over 30,000 fanfics on Pokémon. It does seem like a big accomplishment getting 60 followers on that site though. Maybe I should start uploading there too...?
I would recommend it if you enjoy it.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Fri Apr 16, 2010 4:37 am

Coaster wrote:
Daiko wrote:
Oh dear.

Do I smell something close to what Eragon is?

Blue Egg.. Check
Farmer.. Check
Weird Name.. Check Razz


Now I am looking for two weirdos in outfits to appear, a mad king to be heard of, and some random Dwarves to be thrown in and we have a great new Eragon Book! Smile

Just playing with ya. This is some good stuff, but could you have come up with a more OU nickname for a cow Sad Bessie? I mean, everyone and their Poochyena calls cows Bessie. Evil or Very Mad Call it something weird.. Something like Coaster, but a bit less on the weird side.
Lol, to be honest I never read or watched Eragon :s
And Bessie is too OU to not be used Smile


You should read the Eragon books. They are some good books, but the Movie is awful..


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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Sat Apr 17, 2010 12:52 am

Chapter 2 - "Gospel"

"Hmmm, this is definitely an interesting egg you found here Coaster," said Mr. Mcknight. He gently set the egg back on top of the pillow that was placed upon the table. Sarah quickly found her way to the egg and glanced at it with admiration. "This egg is definitely not from our farm, nor of any Pokémon around here on Route 39. I'm more than curious to what it could be."

"Maybe we should just wait until it hatches?" asked Coaster. Without waiting for a response, Coaster hastily took the egg and scurried to his room. Sarah, still filled with admiration of the egg, quickly followed behind. "Oh c'mon! Let me in Coaster! I want to see what the egg hatches into!" whined Sarah. Coaster was reluctant to let her in at first, but decided that she really couldn't do much harm. Sarah slowly walked into the room, which she had not been in for almost three years. Coaster liked his privacy, and he only let his friends come into his room. Even his parents rarely got the chance to come in. The walls were painted an old fashioned gold, with black streaks running across the walls. His bed was also of the same color, and looked extremely comfortable. His desk was straight across from it, where there were many books and papers lying around, with information from the Quadratic Formula to his latest scribbles about information on breeding Pokémon. To the right of that laid a television, with a Wii hooked up to it, although Coaster usually didn't find the time to play his Wii. "Wow, you sure have changed your room since the last time I was here..."

"Well yeah, wasn't that like two or three years ago?" asked Coaster, sitting down at his desk with his eyes fixed on the egg. Man, what in the world could this be, pondered Coaster. There was no telling what the egg contained. Like his dad said, it was no Pokémon from Route 39. More and more questions popped into Coaster's head, when suddenly he remembered he had to go to Oliver's house to watch the big Pokémon tournament finale. It was the Cianwood Cup, in which Chuck would honor the winner with one of his Machamp's children, a Machop with a special move known as Bullet Punch. The finale was between Camille, a female trainer who came all the way from Newbark Town in search for all the Grass Pokémon there is. She thought that by having this special Machop, she would get some fame and the possibility that someone might actually trade a rare Grass type for the Machop. The other trainer was a Cianwood citizen himself, Frank. He had trained with Chuck for a week once, in order to become a Gym Trainer, but ultimately failed, and begun his own personal workouts in the Whirl Islands. He had become so much stronger than he had been months ago, and Chuck promised that had he won this tournament, he would be guarantee a spot for a Gym Trainer.

"Alright Sarah, I'm going to head over to Daniel's for the finale match of the Cianwood Cup, please stay out of my room!" said Coaster, shoving out Sarah as she pouted.

"Fine! But it'll be your fault if it hatches and something bad happens to it!" Coaster took no time to worry about her threat and dashed out the door.

Sarah wasn't going to let the egg stay in Coaster's room though. As soon as he left the barnyard, she ran into his room and again, stared admiringly at the egg. It's so pretty, she thought. If only I could have it. I bet it's gonna be an awesome Pokémon! A Pokémon that will help me do work around the farm and cuddle with me when we sleep and... - She paused with an alerted look on her face. The egg was shaking furiously! Excited, but somewhat scared, Sarah took in a fresh breathe of air and held it. The egg kept shaking, more furiously and frenetic than ever. Suddenly, the egg hatched.

Sarah stared in awe. The egg had not fully broken off, but the Pokémon's head was visible. Its head seem like it had little spikes coming out of it, and its body was in the shape of a ball. The Pokémon's hands and feet broke out of the eggshell, and it tried to stand up, although it's eyes were still fully closed. As if timed perfectly, Sarah picked up the Pokémon so it could stand on its feet and it opened it's eyes. "Priiiiii!" screamed the Pokémon. Sarah jumped back, startled, but somehow still felt happiness inside of her, something she couldn't stop feeling for some strange reason. "You're... so... cute!" Sarah happily said. She grabbed the Pokémon and carried it downstairs to show the her parents.

~~~~~

"Wow, what a match!" said Daniel in excitement. Camille pulled off the win with her Jumpluff using a significant Bounce attack that completely knocked out Frank's Heracross, who didn't even get the chance to hit the Jumpluff. Had her Sunflora not poisoned that Ursaring with Sludge Bomb, causing it to faint on the same turn after it powered up with a Swords Dance, Frank would had won it easily.

"Well, that's the beauty of Pokémon battling. I got get going now, have to wash up for dinner in thirty minutes."

"Alright cool, see ya tomorrow!" Coaster went on back to the farm. Watching an incredibly close Pokémon battle had Coaster wanting to do some battling of his own. He recalled to the one time when he had the Farm's Ampharos, Static, battle Sarah's Ponyta, Epona. Ampharos took out Ponyta easily with a well timed Thunderbolt, and Sarah nearly cried from Epona fainting. Great times, he thought. He was hoping that someday he could leave the farm, instead of continuing the families business, to become a great trainer like Camille or Frank.

~~~~~

"Oh my- What in the world is a Togepi doing here in the likes of Route 39?" questioned Mrs. McKnight. The Pokémon was in fact a Togepi, and Sarah held it like it was her baby.

"Can I keep him mom?" asked Sarah, pleading with her eyes.

"Well... - "
"Yes, Sarah, you can keep him. Just make sure you stay with him at all times. Letting him wonder about on his own is not a good idea," interrupted Mr. McKnight. This was a test for Sarah, to see if she really could take responsibility of taking care of another. If she was able to, Mr. McKnight could confirm that her daughter was in fact ready to work for the farm.

"WHAT!? THE EGG HATCHED AND YOU TOOK IT FROM MY ROOM?!" yelled Coaster. As soon as he walked in, he saw Togepi in Sarah's arm, and knew that the egg had hatched and Sarah had taken it. "Why would you do this if I had asked you not to Sarah?" asked Coaster.

"I felt that if the egg had hatched while you were gone, it would have been lonely, and I was right, Gospel would have been lonely had I not come in and saved him."

"Gospel? Who in the world is Gospel?"

"It's my Togepi. I named him Gospel because one of the definitions of Gospel is something that brings happiness, and when I first saw Togepi, I felt immediate joy and happiness." Coaster thought about Sarah's reasoning behind the nickname, and although it didn't make much sense, it did feel like a great name for him. And the way that Gospel looked so happy in Sarah's arms... he had to let her have Togepi, or it wouldn't be right for the Pokémon. "So can I keep him Coaster?"

"Yeah, he sure does seem to like you. He likes you a lot actually. As long as you stay nice and play with him when you can, you can have him."

"Yay! C'mon Gospel, I'll introduce you to the rest of the family! Let's start with the Houndour and Growlithe..."

"Prriiiiiii!" Gospel seemed excited, and quickly followed Sarah as she put him down. Heh, I did the right thing for Sarah, Coaster thought. Maybe I can find another egg and have it as my own Pokémon...

"Maaaaa!" a loud cry came from the barn. Coaster rushed to the barn to find a newborn Mareep lying in the pen...


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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Mon Apr 19, 2010 3:19 pm

OMG this is epic, I cant wait for the next chapter. I thought the egg was gonna be a latias or latios egg.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Wed Apr 21, 2010 4:25 pm

Chapter 3 - "Alexandria"

The newborn Mareep had finally hatched. The Mareep egg had been kept in the Flaafy pen for weeks with no signs of hatching, which worried the McKnights. “Maaaa!” cried the Mareep. It looked hungry, so Coaster ran to the silo and found some Oran Berries to give to the newborn. The Mareep didn’t seem any different from any of the others, but it did seem significantly weaker. The McKnights went back to the farmhouse, but Coaster stayed behind. The Mareep’s tail started to glow when it was close to finishing its food. "Odd, that only happens when Mareep are preparing a Thunderbolt," pondered Coaster. “Baaaa!” Before he had time to react, the Mareep jolted Coaster with its Thunderbolt. Dazed, Coaster fell down and went unconscious.

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“Huh… Wha-What happened?” asked a confused Coaster, as he woke up in his room. Daniel and Sarah, along with Gospel and the newborn Mareep, who was sniffing the various papers and pencils on Coaster’s desk, surrounded him.

“You were shocked by that Mareep’s Thundershock,” snickered Daniel. Sarah started to laugh as well, and Coaster became red with embarrassment.

“Please, that Mareep used a very strong Thunderbolt or something. There’s no way a measly Thundershock could knock me out like that.”

“Well, it did. Mareep doesn’t have access to Thunderbolt yet.” Daniel laughed some more. The Mareep heard all the noise going on the bed so it came and jumped onto to see what was going on.

“Ahhhh! Get it away from me!” cried Coaster.

“Chill, Coaster. And it’s not an ‘it,’ it’s a girl,” said Sarah, holding the Mareep in her lap. The Mareep laid quietly in Sarah’s lap, and eventually fell asleep. “Aww, how cute!” cooed Sarah.

“Yeah, it’s cute until it hits you with a Thunderbolt…”

“Oh relax Coaster, just lay down and get better. We need to round up the Tauros later today.” The McKnights allowed the Tauros to roam around Route 39, but gathered then up when it was the breeding season. To most people’s surprise, all the Tauros on Route 39 belonged to the McKnights. But there was a time when the Tauros population was way too high to maintain, so they decided to let some Tauros roam on Route 39 to be captured by trainers. Eventually this process led to always leaving them out on Route 39, and only bringing them back to breed with Miltank. It was a tedious job to bring all the Tauros needed back to the farm, but many of them knew that they were the farmer’s Pokémon, so they came without much trouble.

“Oooh… Welll you guys, good luck with that. I need to… erm… head back home to… do…stuff…” Daniel quickly abandoned his cousins. He did not like herding up the Tauros because of “certain” memories still haunted him from his previous attempt at it.

~~~~~

“Huh? Ugh, not again…” whined Coaster. He seemed to have passed out again. This time neither Sarah nor Daniel were in the room, and when he looked outside the window, it was nearing dusk. Darn, I didn’t get up in time to herd the Tauros, pondered Coaster. Sarah wouldn’t be able to do it on her own, so either dad helped or we’re just gonna have to do it tomorrow…

“Maaaa!” cried a sleepy Mareep. Coaster turned, and startled, leaped out of bed. The Mareep had fallen asleep next to Coaster. The Mareep cried once more then it went to the edge of the bed and stared at Coaster.

“What do you want from me? Just leave my room now, Mareep!” yelled Coaster. Mareep didn’t budged, and it tilted its head in curiosity. Coaster tried to stay mad, but Mareep was one of his favorite Pokémon, so why should he be mad at this one? Giving in to its cuteness, Coaster sat on his bed and held the Mareep in his lap.

“Baaaa…” cried the Mareep, falling back to sleep.

“Well, you certainly aren’t any different from any other Mareep. I should give you a nickname,” said Coaster. After thinking about it for a while, he finally came up with a name. “Alexandria! I’ll call you Alexandria! I remember reading in my history books about a Lighthouse called the Pharos of Alexandria. I think the nickname will fit you well.” Mareep looked up and started to leap in joy. “Haha, I think you actually understood me!” Alexandria’s bright yellow tail started to glow into a bright white color. “Woah, that looks awesome! Why does that seem familiar though? I have never seen any other Mareep do that before,” asked Coaster. Finally realizing what this meant, he scrambled off the bed.

“Maaaa!” cried Alexandria, shooting Coaster with its Thundershock.

“YEOWWW…! Ugh, that hurt… let me- lemme lay dow-“ stumbled Coaster, falling down on the ground, unconscious once again.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Wed Apr 21, 2010 5:05 pm

Not bad of chapters Coaster. I'm anxious to see what goes about of it...
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Wed Apr 21, 2010 7:32 pm

good job coaster Smile

i like the story so far
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Wed Apr 28, 2010 6:13 pm

Sorry guys, chapter four will be delayed until next Wednesday. The end of the school year is here and life is just busy, so I had no time to write it, sorry!
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Wed Apr 28, 2010 6:54 pm

Will it be up next Wendsday?
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Fri Apr 30, 2010 12:42 am

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Will it be up next Wendsday?
Yup. I might even throw in the 5th chapter early for missing this week.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Fri Apr 30, 2010 11:18 pm

Chapter 4 - "Team Rocket?"

“Alright Sarah, let’s bring in the MooMoo Milk!” yelled Coaster from across the barn. He had been carrying cartons and cartons of MooMoo Milk from the barn house to the carriage and he was exhausted.

“Maaaa!” cried Alexandria, who had found a fallen bottle of MooMoo Milk and was licking it from the ground.

“Haha Alexandria! You better enjoy it now, you won’t be tasting it again anytime soon!” Gospel had joined Alexandria on slurping the MooMoo Milk, and with his signature smile, cried out in joy. Sarah had brought the last carton of MooMoo Milk and placed it in the back of the carriage, satisfied with the work she had done. “Alright, I’m going to take these down to Uncle George’s Café. You want to come along?”

“Nah, I need to give Gospel a bath and then ride Epona,” replied Sarah, still enticed with the fact she was helping out with the family’s business.

The McKnights’ carriage was one of a kind. The hood was in fact a convertible one, which meant they could fold it back to enjoy the warm, pleasant heat radiated from the beams of sunlight, or they could have it attached, when the weather was rather discomfit from high velocity of wind or the cascade of rain coming down, quenching every water mass and greenery in Johto. The body was designed in such a pattern that made it recognizable from afar as the “MooMoo Milk Machine,” with blithesome Miltank playing in the meadow, surrounded by a cluster of Oran Berry Trees. There was even a bell that chimed in the tune of a Miltank that the McKnights only rang when they were selling from the carriage. The carriage was pulled by the only two Rapidash on the farm, Rubiera and Heavystep, who were distinguished as the “Fastest Pokémon in Johto,” with their impeccable speed of delivering the MooMoo Milk to designated buyers. Many people in Johto looked down on motor vehicles, since they produced pollution and hurt the wild Pokémon across the land.

Coaster took off from the barn, with Alexandria to his side, happily discovering the soil outside of the barn. Route 39 was more enhancing than Coaster had remembered the day before, as spring had just rolled in and plants had begun to bloom. The trees had grown to full potential, towering high and mighty over the many species that inhabit Route 39. Trees not so big were vivid and picturesque, with every sort of berries flourishing and bathing in sunlight, from the resplendent blue of the Oran berries to the lurid green of the Yache berries. Snubbull could be seen climbing among these trees in search of berries to eat, as food was plentiful at this time of the year.

When Coaster arrived in Olivine City, he rung the Miltank bell, alerting civilians that MooMoo Milk was being sold from the carriage. Many people customers came rushing in, as MooMoo Milk was cheaper when bought from the carriage than when bought from the Olivine Café. Uncle George wanted his brother’s family to do this, knowing that MooMoo Milk was addictive enough that they would have to come to his Café for more. As Coaster exchanged the bottles of MooMoo Milk for money, he noticed a sketchy character run out of the Glitter Lighthouse and into a house nearby. Curiousity was one of Coaster’s weaknesses, and once all the customers had left, he quickly drove the carriage to the Olivine Café and got off without saying a word to Uncle George or Daniel. He and Alexandria briskly walked to a side of the house and took a peak through the window. It was too dark; the windows were cleverly tinted.

“Alright Alexandria, the only way to know what’s going on in this house is to walk through the door. On the count of three, we’re going in. One…two…Thr-!”

“Hey Coaster! Why are you hanging out over here?” interrupted Daniel, who was nearing Coaster’s hiding spot with his Houndour.

“Shhh! Daniel, come here! Quietly!” whispered Coaster. “I saw this creepy looking guy walk into this house from the Glitter Lighthouse, carrying some kind of bag or something. Alexandria and I are planning to go in to see what’s going on.”

“Coaster, I know you lived on a farm most of your life, but in the city, you don’t go into random people’s house,” said Daniel, ashamed by Coaster’s lack of respect.

“Listen to me. This guy was wearing all black and sneakily came to this house. Why would anyone do that for fun? I’m going in to check.” And before Daniel could stop him, Coaster slammed the door open with a thud.

“What? Don’t you kids have some manners? You shouldn’t be knocking down people’s doors!” yelled the mysterious man, who came out from the shadows. He was in fact wearing an all black suit. His shirt had a big, white ‘R’ on it and his hat had a big, red ‘T.’

“No way, you can’t be them. They disbanded 10 years ago! Why come back now?” asked Coaster, as the man pulled a Pokéball from under his belt in preparation of a battle.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Fri Apr 30, 2010 11:22 pm

I'm getting more and more interested in it as the story goes along.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu May 06, 2010 6:54 pm

Alright, I'm changing the day to when I upload a new chapter to Sunday, that way I can work on the chapter over the weekend rather than the weekday.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Mon May 24, 2010 6:49 pm

Note thatr Mareep and Flaffy's wool expand when hit be electricity. Also this is a vaery good fan-fiction! Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Mon May 24, 2010 10:44 pm

hey SSHG, this kinda "died" you know right? and peoples, if you want a funny take on how to write good pokemon fanfiction, then click this link here Very Happy EDITED OUT DUE TO ADVERTISMENT
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Tue May 25, 2010 5:28 am

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hey SSHG, this kinda "died" you know right? and peoples, if you want a funny take on how to write good pokemon fanfiction, then click this link here Very Happy EDITED OUT DUE TO ADVERTISMENT
Do not post links to other fanfics on Coaster's Fanfic Thread. That is just rude. If you want to show SSHG a cool fanfic pm him the link.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu May 27, 2010 4:09 pm

dragonmxz wrote:
hey SSHG, this kinda "died" you know right? and peoples, if you want a funny take on how to write good pokemon fanfiction, then click this link here Very Happy EDITED OUT DUE TO ADVERTISMENT
Dude, this didn't "die." I'm extremely busy with other stuff and the next chapter is done, I'm just revising and seeing if I should add pictures to make it more interesting. Please don't advertise anything on my thread.

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Do not post links to other fanfics on Coaster's Fanfic Thread. That is just rude. If you want to show SSHG a cool fanfic pm him the link.
Thanks for that.

For everyone else, this is NOT dead. I have been busy with some things in life, figuring out why my camera won't record anymore, and some clan business. You can expect the next chapter Sunday.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Thu May 27, 2010 11:34 pm

ok sorry, i didn't mean to advertise or anything.
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PostSubject: Re: Coaster's FanFic   Fri May 28, 2010 2:51 pm

Anyways, the first post is updated with character bios. Check them out.
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