Posts : 25 UT points : 5649 Join date : 2009-05-26 Age : 35 Location : Florida
Subject: Writing.com Story Link Sun Jul 12, 2009 12:41 pm
Dream Chornicales: Wing
A Short story I did for class tell me what you think.
kimahri51992
Posts : 7 UT points : 5595 Join date : 2009-05-20 Age : 31 Location : MD
Subject: Re: Writing.com Story Link Mon Jul 13, 2009 2:37 pm
It was fabulous!
The only thing i saw were a few places where commas should have either been added, moved, or removed. But beyond that, it was fantastic!
Redius
Posts : 25 UT points : 5649 Join date : 2009-05-26 Age : 35 Location : Florida
Subject: Re: Writing.com Story Link Mon Jul 13, 2009 8:34 pm
Thanks for taking the time to read it! To this day I don't know what to do with commas. That's why their are editors. There is still more to the story in my head anyway. Just the last scene needs to be added and it's a long action packed one. Not sure if I have time or the motivation to do it though.
LucasFTW
Posts : 350 UT points : 6005 Join date : 2009-05-25 Age : 27 Location : I am where i'm needed, helping eat cookies.
Subject: Re: Writing.com Story Link Sat Aug 15, 2009 4:20 am
It is brilliant! I abselutely loved it! But like Kimahri said... Commas need work.
